What you guys think of my poem?

The way we lose things is
Only human. It is a way
Of life, no way to go around,
The world is so pitiless towards us
That it will not give back what we really desire,
In our time of need.

The world is
Filled with so much ache
That there is no...

point to fret
Over a lost thing.

We all lose something everyday,
That can not be found. The only way
To get past the ache and strain the
World has put among our shoulders
Is to let go and see that what
Was lost is now under our noses.

And what you don’t want to lose is
Slowly leaving you. You wasted so much time
Looking for that one item that all
Reality has left you. You have lost all things that meant
To you, things that you will never get back just looking for that one
Thing:
Your love
Your family
Your job
Your time
Your life.

that is realy good you should become a writer!!!
I have a poem but I didn't write it I got it from some where, and I love it
it is called imagine
something you can imagin its easy as can be
your lying on the couch the time is ten to three
you wisper will it hurt now and will it spoil my dress
he said love dont worry I will try to avoid the mess
his touch was warm and jentle his voice betrayed my sin
now open a little bit wider and let me further in
its hurtin quite a bit now tears welled in my eyes
its hurting quite a lot now it must be quite a size
all of a suden he gave me a jurk and blood came gushing out
it must of been a big one I'm glad he pulled it out
now if you could imagine it was a dentist chair you would find not what you have imagined its just your dirty mind
lol I love that one