This is a song I wrote for my band, is it good lyrically?

"Man-made Parasite"
v 1: I burn like a sun kissed sky
you wonder why
can't you see the strain in my life
suffering this lie
and as the world continues to turn I try
to ponder why
I torment this plagued...

existance of life
a burning lie

Pre Ch: that grows and grows
until it explodes
no one knows, I know
how it goes

Ch: when it all goes down
I'll watch you suffer
and I'll watch you drown
while I'm holding on...

v 2: My limbs quiver like leaves on a breeze
it's my disease
there's no one left for me to please
only to sieze
and like God the world sees
chaos it breeds
and it burns under my disease
until it bleeds

pre ch 2: grows and grows
until it implodes
no one shows, I'll show
how it goes

ch 2: when it all comes round
I'll watch you suffer
and I'll stuff you down
while I'm holding

br 1: on to this calamity contrived for me
a conspiracy for all to see
you've created your own catastrophe
and the end of all is wrought in me
as the world continues to burn, I try
to wonder why
I feed upon this plagued existance of life
a turning lie

repeat pre ch1
ch 3: when it all goes down
I'll watch you suffer
as I watch you drown
while I'm looking on

br 2: who are you to judge me
you created what you see
who are you to abuse me
this is the end you see

repeat ch 1.

Nice!!! Is this for the band who plays that song who you keep playing over. lol

Sounds COOL! I want to hear it with music.

I really like the lyrics I think it would sound great with music!

My band and I are still trying to round out the sound to make it perfect to our ears, then we want to make some demos before we upload any of the stuff, but right now unfortunately all the cpu's are down but mine and mine is a P.O.S. laptop with very limited memory.

Sorry.

I'm liking all of the devices you've used in this one. very artistic yet controlled of you. (my jaw has dropped...you are amazin!g)