How is my poem?

I remember, back years ago,
Holding your hand, and not letting go.
Now that your gone, theres nothing to touch
Nothing as soft, nothing close as much
I talk to the angels, and pray on my knees
Daddy come back to me, please please please
Now it's all...

over, nothing alive, all I can do is cry and sigh
Listening to that soft music touches my heart
But even though you aren't hear, we aren't apart
No I can't see you, no I can't touch
But just thinking about you, yes is enough
You are my body, my soul, my dad
And that's the way it will always be, even if it's too sad

I wrote that when I was like 12.
Eh?

I really like it (: !
erin
x

I LIKE IT I GIVE IT A 8 LOL GOOD JOB
POOKA
:D

that's waaayyy good for a 12 year old

great f*ckin' job!!!

I love it, it seems really true. It's sad though. Good job!
I would love to hear what you think about my poems (I have about five posted on this site)

its pretty good that has potetiol of like rap song or just a song

I love it.

ZOMG! I wish I was as goo as you right now, when you were 12! It always takes me forever to start a good poem.
Its golden!!