My poem?

This is my poem..
What do you think?
Honestly. I'm in enough pain so it doesn't matter if I get bad comments.

my feelings were real,
not fake,
I tried so hard to give you my all,
but now your gone,
I've been replaced,
I know no ones perfect,
but to...

me, you are,
I stayed with you,
through thick and thin,
was dating you ever a sin?
How come through everything you said and did,
I still didn't win?
time goes by,
from future to past,
I thought we would actually last,
now my hearts broken,
and I think I need a cast,
theres a hole in my heart,
and it's deep,
just like my love for you,
it can't go away,
even when I try,
all I ever do is fall,
because without you I can't breathe,
as I gaspe for air,
I think this through,
what did I ever do to you?
why isn't this fiar?
as I sit here,
a pen in my hand,
and my heart and feelings speaking out,
I ask you what does she have that I don't?
you said you loved me,
and now you don't know,
but right now without you,
I cannot go on,
as these tears slip down my face,
I look up on a star,
and wonder where you are,
where is that boy that made me smile?
even for just a while?
as I search and see him with another girl,
inside the pain just starts to burn,
my eyes, watery like the ocean,
the pain,
like I've been stabbed,
and as I fall down,
hard on the ground,
I wonder if you will ever be there,
to catch me or watch me fall..

So what do you think?

Thank you so much ceja007(L)

Thank you so much ceja007(L)

I like it, it shows some hint of sadness but also some tenderness in your feelings. You really have talent. I like it. :] I write poems too. If you ever want to hear, comment me :p

Thank you so much xxjulixx(L)

very good

Thank you so much moscow(L)