Is my poem somewhat good or horrible?

ME=]] Asked by dabdatgurl 4 months ago, 8 answers.

Okay hehehe I was wondering if you guys can b brutaly honest & tell me if my poem is sumwht good or horrible.
Please b honest..thnx..ily

-*h0pe*-
- by:amairanny d.

A girl once dreamed..
She dreamed to be with hem
She dreamed...

of the happiness
They'd share.
She dreamed of how life would b
If he felt for her
Wht she felt for hem.
A girl once wished..
She wished upon a star
She wished god would help him realize
Realize wht he couldn't yet see.
She wished he didn't see her as
"just a friend"
She wished one day he could
Actualy be hers..
She wished for da day..
Da day he'd tell her he loves her.
A girl once had hope
She hoped deyd last
Forever more..
She hoped da fire
Would never burn out..
She hoped she would never
See a day in life without hem.
..& when all went wrong
When clouds turnd grey
& flowers dried up
When da birds stoped chirping &
Da fire burnt out
The girl..
She still still had hope..

Answered by princexx on Jul 27, 2008, 03:29PM
| 690 answers.

thats actually pretty good! I enjoyed it. goodjob!!

Answered by john000 on Jul 27, 2008, 03:34PM
| 103 answers.

nice one

Answered by babe33xangel22 on Jul 27, 2008, 03:53PM
| 67 answers.

I liked it a lot! Nice Poem!

Answered by funadvice on Jul 27, 2008, 03:54PM
| 42395 answers.

ye this is quiet good !!!
well done
and btw you are pretty &&

Answered by b1ff on Jul 27, 2008, 04:16PM
| 185 answers.

It's pretty good, just run it thought Word or something to fix the spelling mistakes. And thank you so much for realising that the meaning of a poem is much more important than making every single line rhyme.

Answered by confused_lil_girl on Jul 27, 2008, 04:58PM
| 630 answers.

wow I like it!

Answered by funadvice on Jul 27, 2008, 05:27PM
| 42395 answers.

thats sounds like me... sad. and happy, I guess :D haha oh well, maybe one day

Answered by ohsarah on Jul 27, 2008, 05:31PM
| 107 answers.

if you're going to bother posting a poem on here for other people to read, how about making sure the spelling and grammar is correct?

"hem" ---> "him"
"b" ---> "be"
"da" ---> "the"

if you're going to use ellipses, they're THREE dots, not two. like this...

as for the poem, it's not that great. it has no rhythm to it and you can really, really tell a teenager wrote it.

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