Another poem of mine

Me and my sister Asked by jax 5 months ago, 5 answers.

I wrote this poem when I was 12 and just want to see what you think:

The girl that changed my heart

There is a girl,
Who lay her head,
Upon my chest,
To lose herself,
In the valley of the shadow of death.

She never knew where she was...

going,
Rowing down the river to a much forbidden land.
Right into the trap that I had planned.
The animals for boredom,
And the children just for games,
The nooses in the trees
And all the blood in all the cages.

I told her, "if you care to, flip the pages and see what has become of me since the day that I was born."

But, when she looked into my eyes,
To discern the truth from all the lies,
She had stumbled upon a thing,
Which did catch her by surprise.

All the lives I had toyed with and destroyed,
Were all locked up in a box.
The wonder the amazement, disappointment,
And enragement were all coiled up together
In the form of a lock, on a box
That I had kept with me deep inside my heart.

She knew where I had been,
And she knew where we were going.
She burned a path right to my door and I had let her in. But how?
She didn’t say a word. But why?
If she does this anymore,
Then I'll become what I am aiming to avoid,
Under the cover of the night…

There is a girl,
Who lay her head,
Upon my chest,
To lose herself,
In the valley of the shadow of life.

What do you think???

Answered by cjscoot on Jun 22, 2008, 05:33AM
| 75 answers.

it's kind of hard to understand. maybe if you give a theme to it, you'll be able to understand it more.

Answered by iluvjessemccartney on Jun 22, 2008, 06:54AM
| 5 answers.

hey its nice but well I couldnt understand the whole meaning of it ...but it I liked it

Answered by misscrystal22 on Jun 22, 2008, 10:34AM

I think your poem is very sweet and nice!!

Answered by jaes on Jun 26, 2008, 11:45PM
| 635 answers.

I thought it was awesome, it was about the realization of love right?

Answered by jax on Jun 26, 2008, 11:53PM
| 814 answers.

YES YES YES JAES!!! Thank you for taking the time to understand the underlying meaning of my poem! Unlike these spoon-fed babies who for some reason, can't.

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